Critical Reflection

I rectified many grammar and expression problems in my writing. The grammar issues range from tense problem to wrong use of word, from preposition mistakes to unparalleled structure such as “there was an equal exchanging and migrate rate”. Wrong expressions of countable and uncountable nouns have been corrected and APA standard has been applied for references. During the process of improving my essay, informal use of words and expression has been identified such as “…no choice but to run away from the region.” Even though informal phases are not grammatical errors, they make the essay unprofessional and the meaning of sentences unclear. The improvement of grammar is critical in essay writing, because it makes the thesis, topic and arguments of the essay clear, enhances the connection between sentences and strengthens the coherence of the essay.

I will focus on the expression and coherence in the future stage of essay improvement by rearranging the sentence order and adjusting the sentence structure. More delicate and compound sentence structures will be inserted; more connective words and phrases will be added to improve the linkage. For example, the connective words- moreover, consequently, whereas, meanwhile, besides can be used; simple and straight-forward words and phrases will be substituted by advanced ones to better improve the expression. I will also work on the conciseness of the introduction and the conclusion paragraph by deleting redundant words and expressions and adjusting the sentence structure to express the topic and thesis in a more explicit way.